So, I’ve been reading the Fifty Shades of Grey trilogy.
Now is the designated moment when you are to think to yourself, “Ooh! I loooove those books!” or “What a waste of time.”
As I have not yet completed the series, I cannot say that I have formed a complete opinion on that subject, but it is safe to say that my preferance is leaning toward the “waste of time” choice.
I’ve been trying my darndest to forget the fact that these books were originally Twilight fan fiction. Sadly, if you take away the vampire/werewolf angle, all the reminders are there. The lead character is named Anastasia Steele (it seems E.L. has a hint of Danielle Steel’s imagination) who is a self-described plain jane. She is reminiscent of Bella Swan in the fact that she falls down alot, though she has slightly more personality- or should I say personalitieS, as she refers often to her inner goddess and subconscious as seperate entities within herself?
The question is, what makes a write like this try to make us believe that EVERY male mentioned in these books is unfailingly attracted to our main character? I understand that many men can be attracted to a somewhat normal looking gal, (as this seems to happen to me quite frequently) but really?! Not every sequal in my life is filled with another incident of would-be rape by my boss or my best male friend. And I will fully admit that not EVERY guy I come in contact with is attracted to me. There was that one guy that one time…
The biggest flaw I’ve noticed thusfar in these books is the repetitive mentioning of Anastasia’s love interest’s beauty. E.L. has surely gotten this idea from Stephanie Meyer. Christian Grey is described as beautiful, adonis-like, and HOT. Don’t get me wrong, but why the fuck does every main character in a book need to be so fucking perfect? Can’t they have a perfect face with an acne problem? Or maybe just a hint of a pot-belly going on? I have been in love a few times, and none of those people were exceedingly perfect to look at. Of course, if Christian Grey wasn’t so beautiful, Ana would never even look twice at him, because he is a controlling, stalkerish asshole. Do you think she would have let him spank her mercilessly if he looked like John Malkovich? I think not.
Let us not forget how “mercurial” he is. This is not in the god-like sense. It is in the “I’m bi-polar” sense. But let me just ask- what 22 year old woman describes ANYONE as mercurial? I love descriptive words, but even I would never use this one. And most definitely not repeatedly. I would instead have worded such sentences this way- “The dude once again forgot to take his meds, which caused him to be entirely too moody, and made me want to punch him.”
The thing is, I really want to like these books. The S&M factor is quite intriguing. Or at least it WOULD be, if Ana hadn’t ruined the only attribute of interest that Christian possessed. It’s not fair that because virginal Ana isn’t into caning, Christian has to put aside his darker desires. E.L. could have at least made it believable. I do not think a man who is used to beating women mercilessly is really going to be satisfied with a little spanking here and there. He sounds hardly more adventurous than my Rockstar after he’s gotten into the Jim Beam. I think a prequal based on Christian’s Red Room of Pain BEFORE he met Ana would be much more interesting.
Also, I would like to point out that a woman does NOT come every time a guy says, “Come for me, baby.” And a man does not always come at the exact moment that the woman he’s fucking comes. It would be more believable if he came right in the middle of her orgasm and pulled out, leaving her to finish up her orgasm manually while yelling, “You fucker! You never wait for me!”
That’s all I have to say about that.
18 responses to “E.L. James and Her Limited Vocabulary”
Thank you for reading Fifty Shades of Grey, so I don’t have to…
Pure fantasy or not, “Arg” is not a sex noise. “Arg” is a pirate noise.
You could do waaaaay better, I’m sure.
I’d rather saw off my arm than read this tripe.
But you’d read it if I wrote it, right?!
You wouldn’t write tripe. So that’s an easy “Yes!”
I’m with you. You most certainly could write it so much better! And I think you SHOULD!
I kept thinking the author described the “hotness” of Christian (and the wealth of Christian) over and over because it played into the fantasy. The average woman reading 50 Shades probably wound not be into BDSL, so I really thought of a super hot guy helped. You wouldn’t want to do those things with a dumpy, unclean (she always described how clean he was too), unfit guy – I just think the hotness described all the time helped the (albeit unrealistic) fantasy for the reader…
I too have had people laugh at or love these books – never anywhere in between!
Loved your post!!!
It could be a fantasy and still be realistic…
I haven’t read it either, but I’m thinking there’s a Sparkly woman out there who could probably write one better.
I must admit, I liked the first book. But the second and third were complete let-downs. The story-lines were rubbish and due to this, I noticed how badly written these books are. I’m guessing you know that they are supposedly making the films? Haha. Surely the films will only be shown on an XXX T.V channel?
Oddly enough, I’ve thought that if they cast someone charismatic, say…me, as Ana, it might be a good movie. 🙂
If you are Ana you’ll have to be comfortable being naked for most of the time with the potential Mr Grey, so he best be very attractive, as described many times in the books.
I love to be naked…
Well then, you sound pretty suitable for the role of Ana.
I have not had the pleasure, or displeasure, of reading the books yet. So I have no first hand knowledge of them. Howver, I will take your word on the qualirt of books. Quite often things that are hyped up as much as that tilogy was, aren’t worth the publicity.
I just keep thinking while I’m reading- “I could write this so much better.”
I haven’t read 50 Shades of Grey, but I guess I’m not missing much 😛 I get the impression that it’s not supposed to be realistic people having realistic sex–more like fantasy porn on steroids. Still, I agree that I would love to read a love story (even a sexy love story) about less-than-perfect people. Good post!
Don’t worry, I will write one someday.